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Fanfic: Overlooking the Obvious
Author: borgmama1of5
Summary: Dean’s not the only one who missed something.
Spoilers: coda to 5.12
Wordcount: 1190
Genre: h/c
Characters: Dean, Sam
Disclaimer: Just playing in Kripke's sandbox
Rating: PG




Overlooking the Obvious

 

Dean was behind the wheel even though his ribs were killing him because he couldn’t trust Sam with his baby just yet. All right, it hadn’t really been Sam that backed her into the dumpster, but it had looked like Sam and Dean was just going to be irrational right now because he hurt.

 

“Jeez, Dean, how come you couldn’t figure out that wasn’t me?”

 

“I knew something was different, Sam, I just thought…I dunno, maybe you were feeling good or something, you know?”

 

“No, I don’t know.”

 

“Like you weren’t, oh, I don’t know, stressing about the end of the world and Lucifer for once. You were just gonna have a good time, enjoy life.”

 

Dean should have known it wasn’t Sam when he said “You’re a good guy.” Because, yeah, Sam didn’t say that anymore.

 

For just a few hours it had almost been like that sweet spot of time when they’d been hunting and looking for Dad -- Sam hadn’t been exactly happy but they’d made a good team and had some good moments. And yeah, that kid – Gary – was being entirely too agreeable which should have completely tipped Dean off – but he’d wanted to believe him and Sam could go back to being like that so he’d ignored what his gut was telling him. Which was really pretty stupid for a hunter and he deserved the ass-kicking the demon bitch had given him.

 

“I’m sorry. I got fooled.” It wouldn’t have been possible, once, but now …

 

Sam bitched right until Dean pulled over in the lot of Happy Times Motel. God, if he got out to get the room Dean knew he’d never get back in the car to drive to the parking lot. Fortunately Sam had been too busy whining to notice Dean’s inadvertent hiss every time the wheels had hit a bump.

 

“Get us a room, Sam.” He pulled in front of the office door. Sam gave him a dirty look but unwound himself from shotgun and trudged through the rain to the door. Ten minutes later he returned with a key.

 

“Room 135. On the left.”

 

Dean grunted acknowledgment and pulled around. Getting out after four hours of driving was just as much fun as he’d figured it would be. Fortunately Sam had grabbed his bag and gone in ahead.

 

He tried to take a deep breath to steady himself but that was a really bad idea. Some broken ribs for sure. With a wince he grabbed his duffel and followed Sam into the dimly lit, completely unmemorable space.

 

“Gonna shower.”

 

Behind the safety of the bathroom door, Dean looked at the mess the bitch’s boots had made of his chest. He kept his game face on for Sam, but now he hunched over and squeezed his eyes shut against the pain of pulling his tee-shirt over his head. Son of a bitch. Wish he’d thought to grab the Tylenol from the first aid kit.

 

The force of the water from the showerhead felt like a club so he cut getting cleaned up short. Struggling to put on his clean shirt, Dean thought about asking Sam for help taping his ribs but what was the point? Once Sam would have figured out Dean’d been hurt and would’ve pestered Dean to let him take care of it.

 

He’d do what he could when Sam took his shower.

 

Of course trying to get the tape around his own back when every movement of his arms cascaded searing pain through him made it impossible to do any kind of effective bandaging.

 

“Fuck.” He shuffled over to the bag again, grabbed four Tylenol and swallowed them sans water, then gingerly eased himself onto the well-worn mattress. It was impossible to achieve any kind of comfortable position, so he settled for lying on his side with his knees drawn up and bundling the bedspread into a mock pillow to wrap his arms around tucked to his chest. He was facing away from the other bed and the bathroom door, so with any luck Sam wouldn’t notice how Dean was curled up.

 

The muffled swearing from the bathroom barely registered as Dean focused on ignoring how the sheet weighed two hundred pounds where it touched his side.

 

Light from the bathroom fell into the room as Sam came fussing out.

 

“Dean! I have bruises all over my buttocks! What the hell happened?”

 

Dean bit his lip. Shallow breaths.

 

“Don’t know, dude. Poltergeist threw you against a wall in the basement.”

 

“Yeah, well, that explains why my shoulders are sore. But I’ve got, like, twenty or thirty black and blue marks on my ass, for chrissake! All separate, like I got hit by something a bunch of times.”

 

“Yeah, well, call your friend Gary and ask him what he did with your body while he was playing with it. I sure don’t … know.” Dean tried to cover up the catch in his voice as a arrow of pain went shooting through him.

 

He tuned out Sam’s mutters and wished he thought to take a couple swigs from his flask before he’d crawled into bed. No way was he gonna get up and get it now … Maybe he could ask Sam to hand it to him …

 

“Dean.”

 

He jerked at being startled by Sam’s voice right behind him and couldn’t stop the moan that burst out.

 

“Fuck, Sam!” he swore when he could breath again.

 

“You’re hurt. From the way you’re laying I’m guessing ribs. The poltergeist?” Sam’s words were quiet and matter-of-fact.

 

“Demon bitch. She did a number on me before we got her exorcised.”

 

“Did you take anything for it?”

 

“Handful of …” Another piercing throb took his ability to speak away for a moment. “… Tylenol. Couldn’t get it taped right, though.”

 

“Okay, Dean, let me help you sit up.”

 

Sam’s giant hands gently helped Dean maneuver to a sitting position, but Dean was sweating by the time he got upright.

 

Sam inched the tee shirt up and shook his head at the mess of tape around Dean’s torso. Fussing like a mother hen while being as careful as he could, Sam redid the wrapping.

 

As he finished he said, “You know, Dean, you just had to ask me for help.”

 

He said it without thinking. “Wouldn’ta had to ask, once, Sammy.”

 

Although his eyes were closed, Dean could feel Sam’s shoulders slump.

 

“Yeah, and once you would have known that wasn’t me in two minutes, max.” It was said with resignation, not accusing.

 

Sam helped Dean back to a lying-down position and carefully tented the covers over his battered ribs.

 

Dean listened to the rustle of the sheets as Sam settled in his own bed.

 

“Thanks, Sammy.”

 

Silence. Then, “We’ll fix it, Dean. Us. I promise. Work with me?”

 

“Yeah, Sammy. We will. G’night.” And while Dean’s ribs still ached like a bitch, the pain in his heart was a little bit better.

 

 

 

 To see how it went from Sam's POV read sandymg:
http://sandymg.livejournal.com/19893.html?view=141237

 

 


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Date: 2010-01-29 07:28 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dodgegirl22.livejournal.com
Now thats how I would have loved to seen it end
Great job!

Date: 2010-01-29 03:59 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] borgmama1of5.livejournal.com
I just couldn't stop thinking of what still needed to happen...

Glad you liked it!

Date: 2010-01-29 07:42 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] strgazr04.livejournal.com
someone send this to Kripke

Date: 2010-01-29 04:00 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] borgmama1of5.livejournal.com
Wow, thank you for the compliment!

Date: 2010-01-29 08:42 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] palodoecious.livejournal.com
Yes thank you!. g thanks you!

Date: 2010-01-29 04:01 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] borgmama1of5.livejournal.com
I appreciate the thanks!

I just couldn't leave it be.

Date: 2010-01-29 10:02 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mika0279.livejournal.com
girl, you just wrote almost everything I had in my mind after watching 5x11:)THANK YOU:)

Date: 2010-01-29 04:02 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] borgmama1of5.livejournal.com
You're welcome!

*grin*

Date: 2010-01-29 11:11 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dreamlitnight.livejournal.com
That was such a more satisfying ending. Thank you for addressing pretty much all the the loose ends this show left me with.

Date: 2010-01-29 04:03 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] borgmama1of5.livejournal.com
Yeah, it was missing something. And it was weird because I never felt like I couldn't sleep until I had an ending to an episode before.

Thanks for commenting!

Date: 2010-01-29 11:13 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] etoile444.livejournal.com
Nice work! Totally fits! I think that's the truth. Once, DEan would have noticed immediately that it wasn't his Sammy, but now he doesn't know Sam as well and he also was a bit in denial, wanting Sam to be fun.

and you showed Sam well, that he did not pick up on Dean's needs.

Date: 2010-01-29 04:05 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] borgmama1of5.livejournal.com
To me, Dean knew something was wrong but he deliberately ignored his warning feelings because he liked the way this Sam was treating him. Which made me very sad.

Thanks for reading!

Date: 2010-01-29 11:14 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] garnet-words.livejournal.com
Awesome! Thanks for writing this, it's a great coda :)

Date: 2010-01-29 04:06 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] borgmama1of5.livejournal.com
Thank you for commenting!

It wasn't a bad episode, just unfinished.

Date: 2010-01-29 11:25 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] marlowe78.livejournal.com
Sadly, I think Sam is very much different from the one that used to DO stuff with Dean. It hurt to realize that all this time since...whenever, Dean is drinking alone, never hearing anything friendly. Not that Sam will hear much too, but I can't help but feel that Sam really doesn't care about friendly talk and banter. Whereas Dean needs it.
Hey, maybe Dean can make Sam jealous, hooking up with Cas? Poor boys, such a mess...
Well done, and fast ;-) We never see this - because it won't happen. Kripke wants to torture them a little more, methinks...

Date: 2010-01-29 04:09 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] borgmama1of5.livejournal.com
Just like Sam used to believe in the goodness of angels, I still believe Kripke will eventually give us the payoff we've been dying for. I hope I don't end up as disillusioned as Sam...

Thanks for reading!

Date: 2010-01-29 12:42 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lillybette.livejournal.com
\O/ you FTW!!!!
it was awesome!!!!

like this is the 1st coda ever i actually liked...as i said \O/ you FTW!!

Date: 2010-01-29 04:11 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] borgmama1of5.livejournal.com
Considering it's the first coda I ever wrote, then we're good!

Thanks for reading!

Date: 2010-01-29 01:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sandymg.livejournal.com
Absolute perfection! If only and a million. See EK -- it wouldn't take much to get them moving freakin' forward!!!

ahhh.

Okay, mini rant over. You rock girl!

Date: 2010-01-29 04:20 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] borgmama1of5.livejournal.com
I felt a little guilty about posting without having you beta first...but I guess you don't mind :)

Date: 2010-01-29 03:51 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sensue.livejournal.com
I think Dean not noticing was due to his desire to be a big brother again. I remember the scene where Sam told him that it couldn't be like it used to and Dean seemed devastated. For a moment, this episode brought us back to how it used to be. To the fun and laughter, like in Tall Tales.
For a moment, they were brothers; not warriors.
(also, i was a bit dissapointed that castiel didn't show up.) That would've been cool.

As for your story, it was awesome! Loved it. Especially, the whole: once you would've noticed parts. You are absolutely right.
My friend and I were saying that this episode was like fanfiction. How we wish the boys would be like this again.

Date: 2010-01-29 04:24 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] borgmama1of5.livejournal.com
Yes, this episode would have played out a lot differently in year 1 or 2. I was thinking how Sam, even though he was just back with Dean from Stanford, knew the Skinwalker wasn't Dean with about a minute of conversation. And I really think Dean did know but didn't want it to not be Sam because it felt good to him. Again, thinking of Nick the siren and how his 'brotherly-ness' got to Dean.

Thanks for reading and leaving a comment!

Date: 2010-01-29 04:54 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] seesmooshrun.livejournal.com
Loved it. Thanks.

Date: 2010-01-29 05:58 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] borgmama1of5.livejournal.com
Thank your for reading! I was writing this while we introduced ourselves last night :)

Date: 2010-01-29 06:11 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shadowc44.livejournal.com
Very nice! It would have been a better ending to the episode, but I think we fans are focused on different things than the writers, a lot of the time. Very good point that the boys used to be much more focused on each other, and now they've drifted too far apart. It's like they're trying too hard to mind their own business.

Date: 2010-01-29 07:23 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] borgmama1of5.livejournal.com
You are very right, the writers are proceeding from the viewpoint of working towards a point only they (sort of) know, while we fans are recipients of what they give us and have to answer our own questions and wait (sort of) patiently.

Which is where my obsession with fanfic started.

Thanks for reading!

Date: 2010-01-29 06:14 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dawnintheforest.livejournal.com
Oh I like codas, and this was a good one! Thank you for sharing it with us.

Date: 2010-01-29 08:05 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] borgmama1of5.livejournal.com
Thanks for reading and leaving a comment!

Date: 2010-01-29 07:12 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] glenien.livejournal.com
You are like the only thing that could make this episode better. Because it was seriously so dissappointing.

Date: 2010-01-29 09:01 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] borgmama1of5.livejournal.com
I know a lot of people were disappointed. It had a couple 'huh?' moments for me but mostly it just wasn't finished. So I finished it.

I'm glad it helped you feel better! Thanks for reading!

Date: 2010-01-29 08:36 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] gaelicspirit.livejournal.com
Dean should have known it wasn’t Sam when he said “You’re a good guy.” Because, yeah, Sam didn’t say that anymore.

*sad*

True, though. And Dean really needs to hear that. Even though he'd cut his own tongue out before admitting it.

Thanks for the h/c -- she kicked him enough that he was bleeding from the mouth and could barely stand... and then... yeah. When he slung his arm over the back of the seat to pull out, I winced for him.

Codas are fun to read -- and I don't always do so. Thanks for pointing this out.

Date: 2010-01-29 09:03 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] borgmama1of5.livejournal.com
When your review mentioned how much Dean got beat up, I figured you would appreciate seeing how it played out.

Thanks for reading!

Date: 2010-01-29 08:47 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lausbub0402.livejournal.com
I never read a coda before,but I was curious so I checked yours out and I'm so glad I did!
This is absolutely perfect and just the way I wanted it to end.
Thank you so much for finishing it in such an awesome way!

Date: 2010-01-29 09:04 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] borgmama1of5.livejournal.com
Funny, I never wrote a coda before :)

But, yeah, the episode wasn't over when it ended.

Thanks for reading!

Date: 2010-01-30 12:29 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dante-s-hell.livejournal.com
I haven't seen the ep yet, mainly because I knew it would leave me wanting. Now that you've written the right ending, I think I can see the ep!

Thanks for sharing.

Date: 2010-01-30 02:27 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] borgmama1of5.livejournal.com
You'll have to let me know what you thought. Hope it isn't spoiled by reading the extra ending first!

Date: 2010-01-30 02:40 am (UTC)
embroiderama: (Dean & Sam - beers chill)
From: [personal profile] embroiderama
I love seeing them reconnect here. And Sam patching up Dean is perfect.

Date: 2010-01-30 03:57 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] borgmama1of5.livejournal.com
Thanks for reading and leaving a comment!

Date: 2010-01-30 04:05 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] erinrua.livejournal.com
Yup, just right. Thank you for showing Dean's side. Perfect.

Date: 2010-01-30 04:23 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] borgmama1of5.livejournal.com
You're welcome! Thanks for reading!

Date: 2010-01-30 07:37 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pinkphoenix1985.livejournal.com
this should have been in the episode! this is excellent!

Date: 2010-01-31 04:26 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] borgmama1of5.livejournal.com
Thank you for stopping to read and comment!

Date: 2010-01-30 04:15 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] debbiel66.livejournal.com
Lovely ending, thanks so much!

Date: 2010-01-31 04:27 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] borgmama1of5.livejournal.com
It just wasn't finished, you know?

Thanks for reading!

Date: 2010-01-30 05:46 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] blaqheartedstar.livejournal.com
I forgot all about the lady Gary left with at the bar. That so should had cone up during the show. Awesome coda by the way.

Date: 2010-01-31 04:30 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] borgmama1of5.livejournal.com
Yeah, I'm really surprised the writers left that thread hanging, given their tendency to go with the jokes at Sam's expense...

Glad you enjoyed this. Thanks for reading!

Date: 2010-01-30 06:37 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] authoress.livejournal.com
*flails*

You, like, said everything I was thinking and wanted to see in the episode. Why was this not part of the episode? WHY?

*pushes you in Kripke's direction*

*puts in mems*

*continues to flail*

~Jean

Date: 2010-01-31 04:31 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] borgmama1of5.livejournal.com
*hug*

You've put so many lovely codas on episodes for me, I'm happy to return the favor!

Date: 2010-01-30 09:42 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] adrenalineshots.livejournal.com
Yay! I can finally read all these wonderful codas (I'd been kind of avoiding them before finishing mine, so that I wouldn't be too depressed with overlapping points).

I loved this one and it's companions piece! Its good to depart from both the episode and this coda with the feeling that the brothers are getting closer. And I know it doesn't seem like it at first sight, with Dean being clueless about Sam not being Sam and mostly, but I figure that, coming out of a stay in intense therapy, the guys will make good use of the fact that you must foremost admit to having a problem before even beginning to deal with it.

And this here And while Dean’s ribs still ached like a bitch, the pain in his heart was a little bit better.... this sums it up lovely.

Date: 2010-01-31 04:47 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] borgmama1of5.livejournal.com
Thank you!

Just read your coda and it seems we both felt the same need to start reconnecting them!

Come on, show!
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